Behind the Scenes: Chapter Seven of Wrongful Accusations
How to Keep Readers on Edge with Action and Mystery
Chapter Seven of Wrongful Accusations takes a dangerous turn—one that nearly costs Sassy her life. What starts as an ordinary bike ride quickly spirals into a chilling attempt on her life, leaving her with broken bones, a head full of questions, and a disturbing realization about who might be behind it.
Here’s an excerpt:
As I was about to turn off of Front onto Jefferson, I was suddenly rammed and slung from my bike. It felt like I had learned how to fly before the sidewalk came up to meet me.
I turned over, trying to ignore my body’s screams. I built up enough strength to turn my head and saw a tan Chrysler van pull to the curb. The windows were darkly tinted, so I couldn’t see my assailant.
I heard what sounded like one of the doors opening. The speeder was probably coming to check on me and my crumpled-up bike three feet away. An eighteen-wheeler turned the corner, and the van driver closed the door and drove off behind it.
They had no intention of helping me. They wanted to finish me off but got scared.
How I Came Up with This Scene
This chapter is a turning point in the story. Until now, Sassy has been investigating, following leads, and dealing with unsettling situations—but this is the first time she has become a direct target. I wanted this moment to:
Escalate the Threat: Someone doesn’t just want to intimidate Sassy—they want to get rid of her. The fact that they almost finished the job but backed out at the last second adds an eerie uncertainty.
Raise New Questions: Who was behind the wheel? Was it a random attack or someone connected to the case? Sassy’s suspicion of Neil the Neighbor adds another layer of unease.
Make It Personal: The attack happens when Sassy is off duty, during a casual bike ride—this isn’t a professional ambush; it’s someone watching her, waiting for the right moment.
The hospital scene that follows serves as both a breather and a moment to deepen character relationships. Jerry’s quiet care, Cole Slaw’s worry, and Marcus stepping in as both friend and investigator all remind readers that Sassy isn’t in this alone—but even with their support, she’s still in danger.
Writing Takeaway
If you want to write a suspenseful action scene:
Drop the Character Into Chaos Quickly: One second Sassy is riding her bike, the next she’s airborne. Quick shifts in action make for gripping scenes.
Leave Clues Without Giving Everything Away: The tan van, the tinted windows, and Sassy’s realization that she’s seen it before—all hint at the culprit without outright confirming anything.
Balance Action with Aftermath: After the high-intensity moment, the hospital scene allows space for recovery, reflection, and more investigation, keeping the pace engaging.
Try It Yourself
Think about a moment in your story where your protagonist faces a sudden, unexpected danger. How can you build tension leading up to the moment? Can you use small details (like the van’s color or Sassy’s memory of seeing it before) to plant clues for later?
I’d love to hear how you handle writing action scenes! Hit reply and let me know.
Until next time,
Susie
P.S. Catch up on all chapters of Wrongful Accusations here.
P.P.S. Check out the other breakdowns here.